高考英语书面表达读后续写——The Hidden Treasure 课件

这是一份高考英语书面表达读后续写——The Hidden Treasure 课件，共22页。PPT课件主要包含了A story，“I”，Leigh Ann，neighbor，日后的多次频繁接触，很快成为了好友，故事情节，The family，welcomed，had died等内容，欢迎下载使用。

Interpretatin f the Text 文本解读
Old Man Dnvan
Interpretatin f the Text 文本解读 (Wh)
Yunger sister
Interpretatin f the Text 文本解读(When)
1. One summer day, we were playing in a nearby field. It was time t head back hme. (para 3)
和ld Man 的第一次接触
2. As time went n, we ften went thrugh Old Man Dnvan's farm, and he kept n giving us mre luscius fruit. (para 6)
3. One day, we stpped by t see him when he was n his frnt prch. (para 6)
和ld man 的深入交流
4. Sn, he was ne f ur favrite peple t talk t. (para 6)
Interpretatin f the Text文本解读(Hw)
①有一次我跟妹妹一起为了抄近路回家，试图穿过老人的果园。因为听闻老人很凶，我们一路小心翼翼，结果就在快要穿过的时候，老人发现了我们。我跟妹妹以为要遭殃了，结果老人非但没有我们预想的那样砸石头和用枪射击而是递给我们果子。这让我们意外万分。②后来几次经过他家的时候，他依旧不停地给我们果子。③后来我们有一次促膝聊天后，我们发现了他美好的心灵，并成为了好朋友。
情感线： 接触之前，我们听说老人很坏mean。谣传说他会朝孩子扔石头和开枪。因而在一次抄近路，走过老人的农场的时候，我们胆战心惊，被老人叫住的那一刻，更是脑补了石头砸在身上和子弹穿过身体的感觉。但是，老人却意外地給了我们很多水果，我们又惊又喜地跑开了。后来随着经过农场次数的增加，老人不断的提供水果， 我们走近老人了解后发现老人并不是谣言说的那样，而是有着一颗善良的心。情感的变化是从 frightened到surprised 到friendly。
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读 (G-N策略）
1. Interpretatin f given infrmatin首句解读：Para. 1 Every summer, we wuld visit Mr. Dnvan and talk t him.
Given Infrmatin
1. As time went n, we ften went thrugh Old Man Dnvan's farm, and he kept n giving us mre luscius fruit…(Para 6) 2. Sn, he was ne f ur favrite peple t talk t.(Para 6)
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读（G-N策略）
New Infrmatin
① What did they talk when they met every summer? ② What was the matter with Old Man Dnvan ?③ What’s their reactin?④ Hw abut his family’s attitude t ur visit?
1. Interpretatin f given infrmatin首句解读：Para. 2 The next winter, wrd gt arund that Old Man Dnvan had died.
Unfrtunately, his family never seemed t enjy ur cmpany. They never smiled r welcmed us in.（para.6)
① On hearing the news, hw wuld my sister and I feel? ② What did my sister and I d n the funeral?③ Hw abut the family’s reactin?④ What were ur final wrds t the ld man?
2. Interpretatin f underlined wrds下划线词解读：
Old Man Dnvan, farm, my sister and I, summer, fruit, hidden treasure, kind heart, cmpany, his family, welcme
Interpretatin f underlined wrds and given infrmatin划线词和续写首句解读
was discharged frm the hspital
Interpretatin f writing ideas 写作思路解读 1
went ver t visit him right away
decided t g t the funeral
was seriusly ill
Interpretatin f writing ideas 写作思路解读 2
rushed straight t the hspital t see his health cnditin
apprached and welcmed us.
murning fr the death
The Micr-skills Training in writing 表达微技能：之修辞的运用篇
在本篇续写中，大家可以发现情节线部分提供了较多的关键词，内容较为丰富，然而，情感线主要就是两个名词 “the hidden treasure” 和 “ kind heart”。所以，在续写部分，情感的表达就仁者见仁智者见智了，添加适当的修辞必然会使文采大不相同。本篇主要从修辞角度出发，讨论如何提高本文的语言表达水平。
e.g. A list f buildings undestryed was nw nly a few addresses. A list f the brave men and wmen wuld fill a library. A list f all thse killed will never be made.
2. 他一边听着一边一如既往地递给我们香甜的果子。看着我们三五下就吃完果子，他总是温柔地拍着我们的头说： “别着急，慢慢来”。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Have a try 牛刀小试：句子翻译与句型转换听着我们谈论丰富多彩的生活，他笑得很灿烂。_______________________________________(运用metaphr) 听着我们谈论丰富多彩的生活，他的笑容灿烂得如宝石一样闪闪发光。__________________________________________________________
Hearing us talking abut the clrful life, the smile n his face shne like a diamnd.
Hearing us talking abut the clrful life, he smiled brightly.
While listening, he handed ut luscius fruit t us as usual. Watching us eating quickly, he always patted n ur heads, saying, “N hurry. Take yur time!”
3. 一收到这个坏消息，我们焦虑不安，第二天直接赶到医院看望他的健康状况。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(运用simile) 一收到这个坏消息，我们焦虑不安，如坐针毡，第二天直接赶到医院看望他的健康状况。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
On receiving the bad news, we felt anxius and restless. The next day, we rushed straight t the hspital t see his health cnditin.
On receiving the bad news, we were anxius and restless, feeling like sitting n pins and needles. The next day, we rushed straight t the hspital t see his health cnditin.
4. 这台手术的成功与否也许决定了老人是否能活下来。____________________________________________________________________(运用simile) 这台手术也许不能成功，老人能否活下来就是一场赌博。______________________________________________________________________
Whether the ld man culd survive depended n the success f the peratin.
5. 我意识到一起坐着聊天的日子结束了。我们再也尝不到老人亲手种的果子了。____________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________(运用parallelism) 我意识到一起坐着聊天的日子结束了。我们再也尝不到老人亲手种的果子了。______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
The peratin might nt succeed and it was a gamble whether he wuld live r die.
I realized that the day when we sat tgether chatting with each ther came t an end. We wuldn’t be able t have a taste f the fruit grwn by him.
I realized gne were the days when we sat tgether chatting with each ther. I realized gne were the days when we were lucky enugh t have a taste f the luscius fruit grwn by him.
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Paragraph 1 Every summer, we wuld visit Mr. Dnvan and talk t him. He tld us different kinds f stries we were fnd f. But ne summer, we heard that he was hspitalized because he was sick with his thrat. Finding ut that he was discharged frm the hspital, we went ver t visit him right away. The family welcmed us. When asked abut his illness, they tld us nt t wrry t much. When we were t leave, surprisingly, they ffered us sme luscius fruit and asked us t visit him as usual.
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Paragraph 2 The next winter, wrd gt arund that Old Man Dnvan had died. Hearing the bad news, my sister and I culdn’t hld back ur tears. We were heartbrken and decided t g t the funeral. When we arrived, we saw lts f familiar faces frm the neighbrhd. The family kindly greeted us and said they were s glad we had cme. At the mment when we had t say gdbye t Mr. Dnvan, ur friend, frever, we all wept murnfully, but ur wnderful memries f him cmfrted us. We shall live and pass n his message-- t be a man with a kind heart.
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Paragraph 1 Every summer, we wuld visit Mr. Dnvan and talk t him. We shared with him ur clrful experience at schl while he kept giving ut his luscius fruits t us as usual. As time went by, we seemed t be mre a family than gd friends and his family gradually came t greet us with a warm smile. But ne summer, we were infrmed that he was seriusly ill and we were anxius and restless, feeling like sitting n pins and needles. The next day, we rushed straight t the hspital t see his health cnditin. Weak as he was, he cmfrted us that it wasn’t a big deal. It was frm his family that we knew the truth. Old Man Dnvan had fell frm a tree while lking after the fruits and his head was seriusly hurt and need an peratin. The peratin might nt succeed and it was a gamble whether he wuld live r die.
Paragraph 2The next winter, wrd gt arund that Old Man Dnvan had died. Hearing the bad news, my sister and I just culdn’t believe it until we went back hme and saw his smiling face n the wall. I felt a lump in my thrat, tears welling up in my eyes. The family apprached and welcmed us. “ I’m srry fr yur lss.” I gave them a big hug. On my way back hme, the wind whistled thrugh the trees, as if murning fr the death f Dnvan. I realized gne were the days when we sat tgether chatting with each ther. I realized gne were the days when we were lucky enugh t have a taste f the luscius fruit grwn by him. Hwever, he left us a hidden treasure-- his kind heart, which shall never die away with the passage f time.