高中英语2024届高考复习读后续写素材赏析（共四组）

高考英语读后续写素材赏析

（一）

The Journey of Love

In a peaceful park on a beautiful autumn day, I sat on a bench, lost in memories of the past.The sun’s golden rays painted the sky, filling me with a mix of emotions.(paint形象用词；蓝色分词状语)

My mind traveled back to the days when my childhood home was filled with laughter.I could still hear my father’s contagious(感染性的) joy that brightened every corner.His eyes sparkled like stars,(有爱还有神韵的描写) guiding my steps through life’s twists and turns.

But then, life took an unexpected turn, and my father’s health declined.The warmth he brought to our lives gave way to worry and sadness(无灵主语；give way to用的绝了).However, my mother became our rock, showering us with love and support.(比喻修辞手法) Her presence was like a comforting moonbeam, lighting the way for our family.

Days turned into months, and uncertainty weighed heavily on our hearts.And one cold winter night, the final note of my father’s journey played, leaving an emptiness that felt impossible to fill.

In the aftermath, our home felt somber(忧郁), as if a melody had gone awry.We shed tears as we clung to cherished memories.But in the midst of our sorrow, the strength of our bond began to mend our spirits.

With time, we discovered that love had the power to heal.Each day, we added new notes to the melody of our lives, finding joy in the simple moments.Laughter returned to our home, mingling with the echo of my father’s laughter in our hearts(无灵主语+分词状语).Through shared stories, we realized that love can transcend(超越) even the boundaries of life and death.

As the seasons came and went, we learned to celebrate victories and endure hardships.Our shared memories gave us strength and reminded us of the love we still carried.And as I sat on the park bench, the leaves gently rustling(独立主格), I felt a deep gratitude for the love my father had given us.

His spirit lived on within me, guiding my steps and filling my heart with warmth.Among the symphony of memories, I vowed to keep his love alive.For in the music of life, love is the eternal melody that connects us all.(升华love是家庭跳动的音符，永远存在并给我们快乐幸福。)

（二）

 “BANG!” the door caused a reverberation (回声).It was just standing there, with my father standing on one side, and me on the other side.(多好的伴随状语1)

We were both in great anger.“Never set foot in this house again!” stormed my father.(storm可是满满的画面感，say的替换法，可让表达锦上添花) With tears welling up in my eyes, I rushed out of the flat and ran along the street.(多好的伴随状语2，+并列动作加持)

The street lights were shining, causing rather sad feelings.I wandered aimlessly.(多好的环境描写，氛围衬托)

A young father who held a child in his arms walked past me.I felt as if I saw my childhood from another space: happy and carefree.(比喻怎么能少1)

But now ...I don’t know whether it is because I have grown up or because my dad is getting old.We differ in our ways of thinking.He always puts his opinions and codes of behavior on me.(活灵活现的性格特征——是不是霸道父亲的影子) Whenever he does something wrong, he never admits it.We are just like two people coming from two different worlds.(比喻怎么能少2) It feels like there is an iron door between us that can never be opened.(比喻怎么能少3)

I wandered the streets, without a destination in mind.My heart was frozen on this hot summer night.(比喻怎么能少4) As I walked on, there were fewer and fewer people in the streets, until I had only the street lights to keep me company.(多好的环境描写，氛围衬托) When I finally reached the high-rise apartment block in which I lived, I saw that the light was still on.

I thought to myself, “Is my father waiting for me, or is he still angry with me?”(think to myself，say的替换法，可让表达锦上添花) 

In fact, it was nothing.Perhaps, my dad was throwing away some of his old stamps.Perhaps he thought they were useless.I never had the courage to tell him that I liked collecting stamps.All the lights were off except my father’s.

Dad was always like this.Maybe he didn’t know how to express himself.After shouting at me, he never showed any mercy or any moments of regret.However, after an argument he has the habit of tucking me underneath the covers while I am sleeping.(tuck情节中的细节描写，perfect)

This was how he always was.He has been a leader for so long that telling everyone else what to do has become his second nature.

The light was still on.“Am I wrong?” I whispered, maybe ...(这个句式学会了吗? 还处于sb said, “...”句式吗？) With the key in my hand, I was as nervous as I had ever been.(人物的动作神态细节描写1)  At last, I decided to open the door.As soon as I opened the door, tears ran down my cheeks.(人物的动作神态细节描写2)  I suddenly realized that the iron door that I had imagined between us did not exist at all.

Love — it’s second to none./Love comes in all shapes and sizes.(加个结尾，你喜欢吗？你有更好的主题升华吗？期待留言中......)

（三）

Her ashen face(想想什么磨难会让孩子脸庞ashen：looking very pale because you are ill, shocked, or frightened) stood out against the startling (surprising) blackness of her hair.She looked much younger than her fifteen years, a worn coat hanging loose above her.(绝对的外貌描写+独立主格结构使用) We weren’t supposed to take a child, but an emergency call came through that morning.A home was needed for a young girl immediately.

I, together with four children, hurried to get her room ready.The kids were great.Joanne, our second-eldest daughter, did the cleaning and Margaret, Rob and Jeff helped make the bed.I felt my heart pounding in my chest.I was excited, but scared at the same time because I was told an adopted child might give us a lot of trouble.(前句pounding，加上后句细化描写excited but scared at the same time...心情描写真到位)

(情节延续段落)That afternoon, Trudy arrived with the social worker Mrs.Kline.She stepped into the front hall and stood against the wall.I will never forget the look in her eyes.The first thing that came to my mind was that she looked like a hunted animal.(特别形象的描写孩子的胆怯表现淋漓尽致)The children moved towards her, and Jeff grabbed her hand and said proudly, “Come and see your room.I helped make your bed.” Trudy pulled back, speechless.(肢体语言生动形象)

At this point, I stepped towards her and said, “Welcome to our home, Trudy.”(套句模仿1：状语，+主语+连续动作..., “...”语言对话) She looked at me with such blank eyes.But with her head bowed, she simply said, eyes moving back and forth like a creature looking for a way out, “No, thank you.”(套句模仿2：with复合结构状语，+主语+动作，+独立主格..., “...”语言对话)

(情节延续段落)For the first two weeks, Trudy was very quiet.She would come into the kitchen while I was working, and we would discuss school and what she would like to do in the future.Mrs.Kline had given us all the information about her history, but I never mentioned the terrible things that had happened to her.

(情节延续段落)As the days went by, Trudy became a delight to have around.Very quickly, it seemed like she had always been with us.The girls would sit in each other's rooms and giggle(咯咯笑) like typical teenagers.It was a sound that warmed my soul.However, when they talked about new clothes, Trudy fell silent again.

说明：文章中多处看似无关，实则起着上下关联的重要作用，称之为情节延续链或称之为故事推动链。基本上可以分为两类：一是以时间为逻辑转换来推动故事发展，二则是以人物情绪变化或场景迁移来推动情节走向。

（四）

In a peaceful coastal town, where gentle waves kissed the sandy shore and the salty breeze whispered secrets,(故事的背景铺垫也是唯美的) there lived a young girl named Mary.However, Mary had a special challenge - she couldn’t hear everything like others could.But that didn’t discourage her from pursuing her passion for dance.

Mary was determined to become the best dancer she could be.She joined the famous Harmony Dance Academy, a place where her dreams could take flight.Her mentor, Miss Clara, was always there to guide her and help her improve her techniques.Despite her difficulty with hearing, Mary poured her heart and soul into every graceful movement.(刻画人物性格despite不错的选择)

(情节延续段落)As the time for the annual talent show approached, Mary felt a mix of excitement and doubt.How would she be able to dance in sync without hearing the music fully? Fear crept into her mind(无灵主语：表达内心的恐惧), making her consider giving up and not participating in the show.

But Miss Clara saw the struggle within Mary and decided to help her overcome this hurdle.Together, they came up with a routine that celebrated Mary’s ability to feel the rhythm deep within her.They worked tirelessly, practicing and perfecting each step.

(情节延续段落)The night of the talent show arrived, and the stage was filled with anticipation.Mary took a deep breath and embraced the challenge ahead.As the music started to play, she closed her eyes and let her other senses guide her.She could feel the vibrations in her body, as if the music was alive within her.(对人物的动作描述+修辞)

Mary danced with passion, communicating her emotions through her graceful movements.Each leap, twirl, and extension told a story of resilience and determination.(无灵主语：阐释主人公的魅力：意志力) The audience was captivated by her performance, not knowing that Mary couldn't hear the music.They were moved by the strength she exuded as she danced.

(模仿下面一段进行故事情节的推动：给主人公增加点小插曲，小意外，可以增强效果——假如考生在2022高考中，给主人公David跑步时也增加点“意外”，如摔倒后，挣扎起来继续，则更加有画面冲击力: Falling heavily to the ground, but struggling to get back up, he continued running.)But then, unexpectedly, a technical glitch caused the music to stop.Mary was momentarily lost, her heart filled with panic.However, she refused to let this setback define her.In that moment of silence, Mary's determination surged within her.She used her body as an instrument, creating a dance that expressed her unwavering spirit.The audience watched in awe as Mary transformed the silence into an extraordinary performance.

(这一段是否也可以嫁接到2022高考续写中， the field filled with thunderous applause as David eventually crossed the finish line.) The theater filled with thunderous applause as Mary took her final pose.Tears of triumph streamed down her face (眼泪流淌)as she realized that she had triumphed over her challenges.(付出类故事续写均可采用的描述手法)Her dance had become a symbol of hope and inspiration, proving that no obstacle could hold her back.（2022-2023高考续写可以嫁接是吗？22年的David2023年的I都是克服困难，超越自我的。）

From that day forward, Mary’s story spread far and wide, touching the hearts of people everywhere.She became a beacon of strength, showing others that setbacks are just stepping stones on the path to success.Mary’s dance reminded everyone that true greatness lies in the indomitable(不屈服的) spirit that resides within us all.

Mary, the determined dancer, taught us a valuable lesson.No matter the obstacles we face, we can overcome them with passion, perseverance, and the belief in our own abilities.Her story encourages us to embrace our unique strengths and chase our dreams, even when faced with challenges.(升华的结尾段)