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专题 02
如何巧妙构思读后续写的故事情节
之高分技巧、高分手段和易错点
故事构思
读后续写能否拿否拿高分某种程度上取决于故事情节的构思。这就要求考生做到学会分析情节。分析故事情节一般从故事六要素着手，即wh, when, where, what, why, hw。然后根据故事情节发展线和主人公的情感变化来续写文章。简化为：
第一步：分析段首句。根据其关键信息，提出问题，预设故事情节发展走向。
第二步：关注段首句和续写部分的衔接。思考续写第一段和第二段的衔接。根据情节发展构思末句，通过收尾呼应，达到文章升华，体现故事主题。
高分技巧
高分手段
读后续写的故事情节设计中，矛盾冲突和转折总体上应当体现清代袁枚《随园诗话》中“文似看山不喜平”的意思，即写文章好比观赏山峰那样，喜欢起伏，不喜欢平铺直叙。所以读后续写的冲突就体现了这种跌宕起伏，而最终的矛盾冲突会变为积极的正能量。
易错点


在续写过程中，应当体会原材料故事中的语言特点，从人物动作描写，场景描写，情感情绪描写，人物心理和神态外貌描写等方面进行润色，提升语言表达的准确性，完成语言风格高契合度的短文。
典例剖析
【2022年高考浙江卷6 月】
阅读下面短文，根据所给情节进行续写，使之构成一个完整的故事。
I needed t d smething in my cmmunity (社区) in rder t cmplete the cmmunity service hurs required t graduate frm high schl. Sme f my friends had signed up t spend time at a sup kitchen, s I did, t. It seemed like a gd thing t d.
I thught that we wuld just be passing ut dinners t thse in need, but I fund ut we wuld be ding everything frm preparing t serving the dinner. We began preparing the fd, frm mixing salad dressing t separating frzen meat. Much still needed t be dne befre dinner was served, but already utside the building many hmeless peple were gathering. It wasn’t until a cuple f hurs later that we pened the drs and began serving dinner.
As the line f peple came tward me, I gt a little scared. I’d cme face t face with the hmeless: Hw shuld I act? Hw wuld they treat me? Wuld they hate me fr having mre than they did? While sme f the peple lked very friendly, sme f them lked s dangerus. I didn’t have t much time t wrry abut it. I was assigned (分配) t serve the salad with the lady next t me. She smiled at me and said if I needed help, she’d be right there, which I fund quite cmfrting.
I had never seen s many peple wanting fd. They were f all ages and natinalities. Mst f them wre clthes that were trn and dirty. Sme lked like they had tally given up n life, while thers seemed t be making the best f the situatin, smiling and jking. Sme were better ff than thers, but they all needed a gd meal and a warm place t eat. It saddened me t think f hw many peple there were wh didn’t have a place t call hme and the nly fd they gt came frm a sup kitchen.
注意：
1. 所续写短文的词数应为150左右；
2. 至少使用5个短文中标有下划线的关键词语；
3. 续写部分分为两段，每段的开头语已为你写好；
4. 续写完成后，请用下划线标出你所使用的关键词语。
Paragraph 1:
As they came in my directin, I put n my brightest and happiest smile. ________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
Paragraph 2:
I was s happy that I had earned my service hurs in this way.
_______________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________________
第一步： 故事情节构思：
Wh: hmeless peple and me
Where: at a sup kitchen
When: when they began preparing the fd fr cmpleting the cmmunity service
Why: Think f hw many peple there were wh didn’t have a place t call hme and the nly fd they gt came frm a sup kitchen
What: many hmeless peple were gathering befre the shp pened
故事梗概：本文以人物为线索展开，讲述了作者为了完成高中毕业所需的社区服务时间，需要在所在的社区做点什么，作者去了施粥所，作者发现准备过程中要做的事情很多，作者看到无家可归的人靠近时心里有点害怕，但是却忙得没有时间去担心这些，作者看到了年龄和国籍各不相同的人，这让作者感到很难过。
情节构思：无家可归的人笑——作者舀粥——无家可归的人感激——作者感悟——作者发出呼吁
第二步：第一段和第二段首句的衔接
由第一段首句内容“As they came in my directin, I put n my brightest and happiest smile.”可知，第一段描写作者是怎么为无家可归者施粥。
由第二段首句内容“I was s happy that I had earned my service hurs in this way.”可知，第二段描写作者对这次社区服务的感悟。
高分手段 1
行为类
倒：pur/decant
意识到：realize that/be aware that
③主张：urge sb. t d/advcate sb. t d
情绪类
感谢：gratefully/thankfully
急切的：anxius/eager
高分手段 2
[高分句型1] This experience made me realize that there are s many peple in this wrld wh need ur help. (由that引导的宾语从句和wh引导的定语从句)
[高分句型2] I will never frget the way they lked at me when they were given fd. (由关系代词that引导的定语从句，省略了that和when引导的时间状语从句)
【满分范文】
As they came in my directin, I put n my brightest and happiest smile. I wanted t make them knw that I was really anxius t help them. T my relief, they smiled plitely back at me when they saw my smile, and I culd see their exhaustin in their eyes. I wanted t knw what they were ging thrugh and I was desperate t knw what I culd d fr them. They ndded gratefully as I pushed my spn int the pt and tk a large spnful and pured it int their bwls.
I was s happy that I had earned my service hurs in this way. This experience made me realize that there are s many peple in this wrld wh need ur help. It als made me realize that ur small act f kindness can make them feel warm and make a great difference t them. I will never frget the way they lked at me when they were given fd. I am anxius t urge the wrld t d everything pssible t help thse in need.