67 各地中考真题再现03 中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）

67 各地中考真题再现03  

2023年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版） 

（一）

减负之后，同学们有了更多的课余时间。某校英语角就“如何让课余生活更有意义？”展开了讨论，大家各抒己见。请你根据下图提示，以“How To Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?”为题，用英语写一篇短文。

注意：(1) 短文应包括所给内容要点，可适当发挥，使文章连贯；

      (2) 词数90左右，短文开头已给出，不计入总词数；

      (3) 短文中不得出现考生的真实姓名、校名等信息；

      (4) 参考词汇：提升素养promote literacy。

How to Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?

Nowadays, we students have much more spare time than ever before, but how to make our spare time more meaningful?

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【写作思路】

本文属于材料作文，要表达如何让课外生活更有意义。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

【参考范文】

How to Make Our Spare Time More Meaningful?

Nowadays we students have much more spare time than ever before, but how to make our spare time more meaningful?

My schoolmates give the following suggestions. First  it's good to help our parents do some housework to show our love for them. Second, we will know more about the world by reading. Third, it is a good chance for us to get close to nature and relax ourselves.

In my opinion, we can do some sports to make us stronger and healthier. What's more, we can take an active part in some social activities as volunteers to help those in need.

In a word, let's make full use of our spare time and promote our literacy.

【名师点评】

这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如a good chance to do, get close to, in my opinion, what’s more, take an active part in, in a word, make full use of, spare time以及“比较级and比较级”等，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

【点睛】

写作时可以从以下几个方面做起：

认真审题。审好题是写好书面表达的关键。审题时要注意试题的要求，抓住要点，词数符合要求。

构思提纲。有了提纲，我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关的写作材料。通常书面表达给出的话题是开放的，而具体的内容要求学生自己发挥，因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。

初写短文。一切都准备就绪，就可以动笔写作了，在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。同时还要注意使用恰当的连词，使句子衔接自然。

修改润色。修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外，还要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，格式是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。

（二）

为了让学生吃到更加营养、安全的食品，政府出台了陪餐制，要求从 4 月 1 日起，学校领导陪同学生用餐。请你根据以下要点，给校报英语专栏写一篇短文，谈谈自己的看法。

1. 学生吃得健康、安全；

2. 及时发现就餐问题；

3. 食堂提供食品多样；

4. 父母更加放心。

注意：1.词数 80 词左右；开头已给出，不计入总词数；

      2. 可适当增加细节，以使行文连贯；

      3. 参考词汇:规定 regulation (n.)；食堂 cafeteria (n.)；营养的 nutritious (adj.)

A new food safety regulation was put into use on April 1 to improve nutrition and food safety in schools. It asks the school managers to eat with students in their cafeterias.

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【写作思路】

本文属于材料作文，就政府出台的“陪餐制度”谈谈你的看法。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

亮点说明：这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如thanks to, take place, be able to, provide sth for sb, in other words, worry about, not...at all, carry on, first, second以及also，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

【参考范文】

A new food safety regulation was put into use on April 1 to improve nutrition and food safety in schools. It asks the school managers to eat with students in their cafeterias.

Thanks to the regulation, something great has taken place in our school. First, we  eat healthier and safer than before. Second, if there is any problem about food safety or other, our school leaders are able to know and solve it quickly. Also, the cafeteria workers are trying to provide different kinds of food for us. In other words, our parents needn’t worry about our diet any more.

We teenagers are still young and need to grow healthy, so I think the new regulation is really good and necessary. I hope it will be carried on forever.

（三）

文章讨论了许多年轻人很在意自己外貌的问题，文章的最后指出：“We need to judge people by what they do, not what they look like.” 你同意文章最后提出的观点吗？对此观点你有何看法？请根据下面提示写一篇英语短文谈谈你的看法，阐述理由，并举例说明。

写作要点：

I. Your opinion (agree/ disagree /…)；

2. Reasons (looks, personality品性， ability...)；

3. An example (yourself/ a person around you/ a famous person/…).  

要求：

1. 短文应包括提示中所有的写作要点，条理清楚，行文连贯，可适当发挥；

2. 如举自己或身边的人作为例子，不能出现真实的人名和地名；

3. 词数不少于80。

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【写作思路】

这是一篇要求根据文章中许多年轻人很在意自己外貌的问题，文章最后提出判断一个人应该根据他做了什么，而不是根据一个人的外貌来判断，对这一观点提出自己的看法。动笔前先要认真阅读要点，围绕要点组织材料，然后用正确的英语句子把这些内容表达出来，在此基础上亦可适当发挥，注意不要遗漏材料中给出的要点。根据材料可知本文主要是应用一般现在时态，注意标点符号及大小写等问题，不要犯语法错误。注意上下文之间的逻辑关系，语意连贯。

【参考范文】

范文1

I agree with the opinion. Compared with looks, personality and ability are more important. Because we can’t change our looks easily, but we can decide and control what we do. Thnaks to the kind and hard-working people, our society is becoming better and better. 

For example, Ma Yun, a well-known businessman, doesn’t look handsome, but he created Alibaba which has changed our lifestyle and made our life more convenient. He has been doing so much for our society that we all admire him. Because of his contribution to our society, we even think he looks so cool. 

So let’s try our best to do more useful things for our society and pay less attentionto our looks.

 范文2

In my opinion, I think we need to judge people by both what they do and what they look like.

A person's personality and ability are very important, but for some jobs, looks are also important, such as an actor or an actress, a waiter or a waitress, or even a teacher. Because it's enjoyable to see a good-looking person.

For example, my teachers in my class all teach very well, and they are kind and helpful. All of us like them. But the most popular teacher is my English teacher, because she looks really beautiful. She dresses herself up every day and always has a smile on her face.

So let's try our best to improve our ability, personality and looks.

（四）

根据中文和英文提示，完成一篇不少于50词的文段写作。文中已给出内容不计入总词数。所给提示词语仅供选用。请不要写出你的校名和姓名。

假如你是李华，你们学校正在开展“安全月”宣传活动，倡议大家制作关于安全教育的主题海报，你们班交换生Peter给你发邮件询问相关事情。请用英语回复一封邮件，告诉他海报上交的时间，并分享你设计海报的一些想法。

提示词语：design，safety rule，careful，protect，picture

提示问题：When should you hand in the poster?

          What would you like to share with Peter about designing the poster?

Dear Peter,

I'm glad to receive your email _______________________________________________________________

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If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.

Yours,

Li Hua

【写作思路】

这篇作文要求我们以李华的身份给Peter写一封邮件，告诉他关于制作关于安全教育的主题海报的相关事宜。由题目中给出的提示问题可知，短文中应包括以下内容：首先告诉Peter海报上交的时间；然后和他分享一些设计海报的想法。第二个内容应该是短文的主体。题目中并没有规定具体的写作内容，学生们应联系自己的实际生活，展开合理的想象，将这些内容补充完整后，用正确的英语表达出来，这是写作中的一个难点。短文应以一般现在时为主、第一、二人称来叙述。写作时应注意：首先要合理安排短文内容，叙述应有层次、有条理。可以使用一些表示先后顺序的词或短语，如First, Second, Last but not least等等。题目中给出的提示词应该在短文中用上。其次应注意文章的表达，英语句式的结构与汉语是不同的，因此不能根据汉语思维逐词翻译，应该从句式的整体考虑，先确定主干结构，然后添加修饰成分。为提升作文档次，应注意使用一些高级词汇、短语以及复合句、非谓语动词等复杂结构。同时语句之间使用恰当的连接成分，使文意上下连贯，表达流畅。

【参考范文】

Dear Peter,

I'm glad to receive your email. As it is required，you are supposed to hand in the poster before next Friday.

Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you. First and foremost，the basic safety rules are of great importance，which should be included in your poster. In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school. Last but by no means least，if I were you，I would add a few suggestions about safety awareness，considering that better safe than sorry. In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.

If there is anything more that I can help with, please let me know.

Yours,

Li Hua

【名师点评】

这是一篇优秀的作文，短文作者根据题目要求，给Peter写邮件，告诉他制作主题海报的一些事情。短文有以下几个优点：首先文章内容完整，结构清晰，符合题目要求。除题目中给出的开头和结尾，短文主要包括两个内容：第一段用一句话告诉Peter上交海报的时间；文章的中心和重点是放在了第二段上，这一段中作者和Peter分享了一些制作海报的想法。主要从四个方面进行阐述，内容非常详实，并使用了First and foremost, In the second place, Last but by no means least, In addition等短语，分清了这一段的层次，叙述非常有条理。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称，语法规范，用词准确，并使用了较复杂的句式结构，表现了作者较强的语言运用能力。短文中较好的句型有：Being your close friend，I am extremely willing to share some ideas about designing the poster with you.、In the second place，following the safety rules is so meaningful and crucial that you had better remind your readers of its significance and advise them to be careful both in and out of school、In addition，it is a good idea for you to draw a few pictures on your poster so as to make it more lively and acceptable.等。

（五）

假定你是李华，收到英国笔友 Harry 的邮件，获悉他在机器人制作比赛中获奖。请根据邮件内容给他回复。词数 80 左右。

参考词汇：congratulation 祝贺注意事项：

1. 回复邮件时可适当发挥，邮件格式已给出，不计入总词数；

2. 意思清楚，表达通顺，行文连贯，书写规范；

3. 请勿在文中使用真实的姓名、校名及地名。

Dear Harry,

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Yours,

Li Hua

【写作思路】

此类观点表达和原因说明类的作文，在我们三轮的中考复习中进行过系统的训练。学生可根据日常所授的写作模板，对全文内容及结构进行合理安排。

（1）结构：开头表示祝贺，使用所给提示词；

（2）正文要点：表达兴趣并说明原因，至少两点（如热点科技，对科技创新的兴趣，对生活的改变，对医疗、救援的帮助等）；

写作时从单词拼写到句子结构，从时态到语态，都应该注意统一。在打草稿时把需要用到的关键词、高级句式、关键结构甚至注意事项等简单地写在题目旁边，以尽量规避错误。

【参考范文】

Dear Harry,

Congratulations！How glad I am to share your good news!

I think robots are helpful in many ways. And in the future, they will play more important roles in our daily life. Plus, I am dying to have a robot of my own. I can have it take care of my grandparents when we are not at home. You see, my grandparents are old and cannot move easily. It can help them do some housework such as cooking, cleaning the house and so on.

Hoping you will make greater progress.

Yours,

Li Hua