70 各地中考真题再现06 中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版）

70 各地中考真题再现06  

2023年中考英语书面表达高分作文攻略（全国通用版） 

（一）

每年的 6 月 6 日是我国的“爱眼日”，可见保护中小学生的视力非常重要，为此，学校将在英语文化节期间举行一场“爱眼日”英语演讲比赛。请你写一篇英语演讲稿，谈谈你对保护视力重要性的认识和建议。

内容如下：

1. 保护视力的重要性（请写 1 点）；

2. 对保护视力的建议：（1）阅读时注意用眼卫生；（2）少用电子产品；（3）常看绿色植物；（4）做眼保健操；（5）多做户外运动。

要求如下：

1. 结构完整，表达通顺，语言规范，书写清晰；

2. 文中不得出现任何真实的人名，学校名等信息；

3. 词数 80 左右。开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。

参考词汇：

Sight Day 爱眼日；electronic products 电子产品；eye-protecting exercises 眼保健操

Dear friends,

June 6 is our country’s Sight Day. ____________________________________________________________

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Thank you!

【写作思路】

本文属于话题作文，谈谈你对保护视力重要性的认识和建议。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

【参考范文】

Dear friends,

June 6 is our country’s Sight Day. As we all know, eyes are windows of the soul. Everyone understands the importance of the eyes. But now more and more students are getting near sighted. So how to protect eyes still remains a question. Here is some advice on how to protect your eyesight.

You should not keep your eyes working for two long when reading, you should keep the book about a foot away from you. After reading for an hour or two, you’d better have a rest by working in the distance or looking at the green plants to make your eye relax. You ought to remember not to read in dim light or in the sun. Don’t read in a moving bus or in bed. Besides, try to use less electric products. What’s more, doing eye-protecting exercises will help you keep good eye sight. Last but not least, we can also try to do more exercise in our spare time.

Only by doing these simple things can we keep good eyesight.

【点睛】

写作时可以从以下几个方面做起：

认真审题。审好题是写好书面表达的关键。审题时要注意试题的要求，抓住要点，词数符合要求。

构思提纲。有了提纲，我们就可以根据提纲和主题确定相关 写作材料。通常书面表达给出的话题是开放的，而具体的内容要求学生自己发挥，因此选择恰当的素材也是使短文中心突出、明确的关键。

初写短文。一切都准备就绪，就可以动笔写作了，在写作的过程中我们要注意句子的准确性、连贯性以及简洁性。使用的词语、短语及句型尽量用自己有把握的词。同时还要注意使用恰当的连词，使句子衔接自然。

修改润色。修改润色是获取高分的必要步骤。这一步我们除了检查短文的各种错误外，还要检查语法结构是否合理，有无重复、啰嗦的语言，大小写是否正确，格式是否正确，词数是否符合要求等。

（二）

“人生没有彩排，生命没有重来”，你平安、健康、快乐地成长是父母最大的心愿。今年6月下旬学校将举办一场以“Keep away from the danger!” 为主题的英文演讲比赛。假如你是王雷同学，大家推选你参加这次比赛。请跟进以下思维导图提示，写一篇英文演讲稿。

写作提示：

写作要求：

1. 不得使用真实姓名和学校名；

2. 所有的提示词都须用上，包含以上所有要点，可适当增加细节，使内容充实，行文连贯：

3. 字迹工整，语言精练，表达准确，条理清楚：

4. 词数100词左右。(演讲稿的开头和结尾已给出，不计入总词数。)

Keep away from the danger!

Hello! Everyone, I’m Wang Lei. The danger is around us. So we must learn how to keep away from the danger, First, we mustn’t go swimming without our parents’ or teachers’ permission.

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In a word, we must try our best to keep away from the danger!

That’s all. Thank you for listening!

【写作思路】

这篇作文要求我们以Keep away from the danger为题，写一篇演讲稿。审题可知，题目中利用思维导图的形式，列举了这篇文章中应该包括的几个要点。观察这个思维导图可知，短文应该从游泳、交通、交友、饮食、学校安全以及毒品等六个方面进行叙述，每个方面都给出了一些提示词，学生们可以利用这些提示词来组织语言，用完整的句子表达出来。文章应使用一般现在时、第一人称为主来叙述。写作时应注意：首先题目中给出的所有提示词以及要点都应包括在内，不要有所遗漏。可以根据表达需要进行拓展，使文章内容更加充实。但应注意拓展内容应与文章主题紧密相连，不要写没有用的东西。其次应注意英语的表达习惯和汉语是不同的，不要根据汉语思维逐词翻译，写汉语式的英语。应从句式的正确结构出发，选择适当的单词、短语和句型。句式结构可以简单句为基础，穿插并列句、复合句以及其他复杂结构，提升文章档次。同时语句之间应使用一些衔接成分，注意叙述的层次性，条理清楚，行为连贯。

【参考范文】

Keep away from the danger!

Hello! Everyone, I’m Wang Lei. The danger is around us. So we must learn how to keep away from the danger. First, we mustn’t go swimming without our parents’ or teachers’ permission. When we go swimming, we must wear life jackets. Second, we must obey the traffic rules. We should walk on the pavement. When we cross the street, we mustn’t look at the mobile phones. Third, we may have some friends on line, but we mustn’t believe whatever they say. Besides, don’t meet online friends alone. Fourth, we must wash our hands before having meals. Don’t eat food that goes bad because it is bad for our health. Fifth, when we are in school, we can’t run on the hallways. You should get on well with your classmates and don’t fight with them. If someone threatens you, call for help. Last but not the least, never try drugs. If you see someone selling drugs, call 110 at once.

In a word, we must try our best to keep away from the danger!

That’s all. Thank you for listening!

【名师点评】

这是一篇优秀的作文，短文作者根据题目要求，给我们介绍了生活中应如何远离危险，保证我们的安全。短文有以下几个优点：首先文章内容完整，包含了题目中要求的所有内容，提示词都使用上了。文章中从六个方面进行了具体的介绍，每个方面前都有表示顺序的词First, Second… Last but not least等，使文章的结构非常清晰，叙述有条理。其次短文中使用了正确的时态和人称，语法规范。句式结构完整，符合英语的表达习惯。文章中使用了简单句、宾语从句、状语从句、定语从句、祈使句等结构，句式多变，表达准确、清楚。文章中使用了一些较好的短语和句型，如When we cross the street, we mustn't look at the mobile phones、Third, we may have some friends on line, but we mustn't believe whatever they say、Fourth, we must wash our hands before having meals.、You should get on well with your classmates and don't fight with them.、If someone threatens you, call for help.、Last but not the least, never try drugs. If you see someone selling drugs, call 110 at once.等。

（三）

初中生活，精彩纷呈。回首过去你是否感到充实和快乐，展望未来你是否对高中生活充满期待，请结合以下提示谈谈你的感悟。

提示：1. 初中阶段你有哪些收获；

      2. 初中阶段你有哪些遗憾或未实现的愿望；

      3. 你对未来的高中生活有哪些计划或打算。

要求：1. 80-100词，首句已给出，不计入总词数；

      2. 字迹工整，语言流畅，表达准确，逻辑清晰。

The life of my junior high school is coming to an end. ____________________________________________

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【写作思路】

这是一篇提纲类作文，初中生活，精彩纷呈。回首过去你是否感到充实和快乐，展望未来你是否对高中生活充满期待，请结合以下提示谈谈你的感悟，动笔前应先认真阅读材料，围绕所给材料组织内容，确定主要短语，句式等问题。通过阅读材料可知这篇短文主要使用的人称就是第一人称，时态为一般现在时态，这方面需要注意的问题比较少。动笔前可以按照材料内容列出简单提纲，写出关键单词。写作中注意语义通顺，符合逻辑关系。上下文之间可以适当使用连接词

【参考范文】

The life of my junior high school is coming to an end. Since I came to the junior high school, I’ve gained confidence and happiness. With the help of our teachers, I’ve learned how to be a good person as well as plenty of knowledge. I’ve also made some good friends.

However, there is still something that I feel sorry about. Because I was busy with my schoolwork, I couldn’t keep on reading. Once in a while, I felt so upset and anxious that I quarreled with my parents.

In the future, I’ll try to make good use of time and spend more free time reading books. Meanwhile, I’ll get on well with my parents. I believe I’ll have a happy and colorful life.

【名师点评】

这篇短文不使用了大量的短语，可见该生英语功底扎实。.如With the help of our teachers, I’ve learned how to be a good person as well as plenty of knowledge. I’ve also made some good friends.等使文章的表达更丰富，更有逻辑性，更富有条理。

（四）

习近平总书记在全国教育大会上提出了“立德树人”的人才培养根本任务，作为初中毕业生，你有什么人生规划？请根据以下提示，写一篇英语演讲稿。

提示：

1. 作为中国人而自豪：过去，我国优秀的传统文化影响了世界：今天，祖国在全国人民的努力下越来越强大，许多科技世界领先；…

2. 为实现“中国梦”而奋斗：学会做一个懂感恩、守规矩、善良诚信的人；不畏难，努力学习知识、提高能力，将来成为一名…

要求：语句通顺，意思连贯，可根据提示适当发挥，不要逐句翻译；演讲中不得提及生个人身份的相关信息，如人名、校名或地名等；词数80—100，开头结尾已给出（不计入词数）。

Hello, everyone! __________________________________________________________________________

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That's all. Thank you!

【写作思路】

本文属于材料作文，谈论祖国的伟大强盛以及为实现中国梦我们应该做的努力。根据要表达的内容确定并准确运用时态，上下文意思连贯，符合逻辑，可适当增加内容。

【参考范文】

Hello, everyone! As a Chinese, I am so proud of it. In the past, our great traditional culture made a difference to the world, such as sailing, communicating and so on. Nowadays, our country is becoming stronger and stronger by working hard of all Chinese. A lot of science and technology lead the world, such as high speed, Chang’e 4 and Hong Kong-Zhuhai-Macau Bridge and so on.

As a teenager, we should do as follows to achieve our Chinese dream. First of all, we are supposed to thank all the people who devote themselves to making our country wonderful. What’s more, we need follow the rules. In school we should obey the school rules. Only by doing these dimple things can we become a person that the country needs. In addition, we’d better not lie and be a honest man in order that all people can trust us. Last but not least, we should try our best to work hard and when face difficulties, we never give up. I am going to be a scientists. If I am a scientist, I will do more researches and let other countries admire us.

That's all. Thank you!

【名师点评】

这是一篇优秀的作文，很好的完成了试题规定的任务，语言表达符合英语习惯，准确运用时态、主谓一致，特别使用一些亮点词句，如be proud of, make a difference to, such as, and so on, 比较级and比较级, devote oneself to doing, in order that, try one’s best以及first of all, what’s more, in addition和last but not least等，增强逻辑关系，增加上下文意思连贯，用词准确，句子通顺，行文连贯。

（五）

湘西自治州正在进行“美丽湘西”建设，我们要积极参与“美丽湘西”建设活动，从小事做起，让我们家乡变得更美。作为学生，请以“Start out small”为题，用英语写一篇倡议书。

要点提示：1.多种植树木和花草，不乱砍伐树木。

          2.购物时重复使用袋子。

          3.不乱扔垃圾，保持河流等干净。

          4.遵守公共秩序，做文明学生。

要求：1.80词以上。文章的开头已给出，不计入总词数；

      2.文章须包括所有要点，可适当发挥，使短文意思通顺、语气连贯、过渡自然。不得在作文中出现学校真实的名称和学生的真实姓名。

参考词汇：protect the environment；reuse bags；plant；cut down；throw；wait in line；be wise；obey public rules

Start out small

Hello, everyone. We should try our best to make our hometown Xiangxi more beautiful and comfortable. What can we do for our hometown? ___________________________________________________________________

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【写作思路】

这是一篇话题作文，根据材料中的相关信息介绍一下如何才能为“美丽湘西”建设做出贡献。所提供的材料中列举了我们要积极参与“美丽湘西”建设活动，从小事做起，让我们的家乡变得更美。主要从1. 多种植树木和花草，不乱砍伐树木。2. 购物时重复使用袋子。3. 不乱扔垃圾，保持河流等干净。4. 遵守公共秩序，做文明学生。这四个方面去介绍。时态为一般现在时，人称为第一人称。注意作文中必须包含材料上的所有信息，并适当发挥。写作时，避免使用汉语式的英语，尽量使用我们熟悉的句子或短语。语法要正确，表达要符合英语习惯，注意时态、时间状语的搭配及主谓一致问题。写作中适当使用连词，注意上下文联系紧密，符合逻辑关系，表达具有条理性。

【参考范文】

Start out small

Hello, everyone. We should try our best to make our hometown Xiangxi more beautiful and comfortable. What can we do for our hometown？In order to make our hometown more beautiful， as students, I think we should start from small things. First of all, we should know the importance of protecting the environment. We should plant more trees and flowers and not cut down trees randomly. Second, we had better reuse the bag when shopping. We can't throw rubbish about, and we should keep the rivers clean and so on. In addition, we must obey public rules and be civilized students. When we got on the bus, we should wait in line.

【名师点评】

【高分句型一】

I think we should start from small things. 我认为我们应该从小事做起。we should start from small things.做think的宾语。

【高分句型二】

When we got on the bus, we should wait in line. 我们应该排队等候上车。

句子When we got on the bus是由when引导的时间状语从句。